Fawn - Moonlight Walk. [ May need to click read more, its a very long piece ]

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I woke up. My body shuddering from my dream..then I realised i was safe, In the endless forest. I inhaled the earthy scent of the great oak tree around me and snuggled back into my mossy bed when I realised something. Everything around me was dark, and so was outside. What had happened? Was it the end of the world? I peeked my head out from under my sleeping spot and I heard noises of deer about the forest..I cautiously crept out from under the tree and looked around, my muscles tensed, ready to bolt at the snap of a twig, the glimpse of a predator. A robin flew over my head and perched on a branch, singing its song. It was safe..but what was wrong with the sky, it was now pitch black? I walked my way through the forest slowly when something darted out of the bushes. I stared at it, it looked like a wolf but it was smaller. It had red fur like the trees in autumn on its back, a long thoughtful muzzle, a bushy tail which was white tipped, as was its ears. And its eyes were a startling green, like the shiny back of a dragonfly. It had a glowing symbol above its head, so I knew it was highly thought of by the gods. It performed a little bow and I bowed back , then I was suddenly aware of another fox climbing out of the bushes to stand next to it, her fur was more orange and her eyes were like two yellow orbs. The nuzzled eachother then ran away into the forest as I ventured on. I was vaguely aware that I was heading in the direction of the pond and i soon arrived to see many deer calmly bathing in the waters. I settled down by the edge of the pond, gazing at it. There was little yellow, gleaming dots flittering over the pond and zipping around over the lillypads. I then turned my gaze skywards, the sky was black and littered with shiny white dots, I looked further and there was a massive circle shining brightly, its silvery rays reaching down and touching the water.
" I suppose your wondering what they are, aren't you little one? " Came a voice beside me, I looked and saw a wise old deer with a carved wooden mask and black fur, streaked with silver from its age. I replied, " Yes, What are they?"
He began to say, " Well, Young one, they are called stars and there are many beleifs about them. There is the thought that the stars shape out symbols , which are called StarSigns depending on the month you are born you are a certain star sign . "
" Like what? " I replied, my eyes gleaming with enthusiasm.
" The almightly bull, Taurus, the stars shape out his amazing horns. There are others like Aries, the great ram with the proud arched neck and curled horns. But there are other beleifs..I beleive that the great deers of the past are up there, watching over us like angels "
" What are angels? " I wondered aloud
" They are the most beautiful creatures of the world " Replied the deer.
" Are they angels? " I said, gesturing towards the golden gleaming lights flittering across the pond.
The elder deer let out a laugh , " No, they are fireflies, insects. "
My gaze turned towards the big circle " What is that then , is that a star? "
The elder deer paused for a second before replying " No, that is the moon. Some beleive it is the one of the twin god's eye. "
" Then why doesn't it blink? " I tilted my head.
" It does, slowly, day by day before it is shut completely. There are two gods. The one that has the eye of the moon is the thinker, thinking up creatures and ways to keep us safe. The one that has the eye of the sun never fades out, because it is always watching over us, protecting us. "
" Wow. " Was all I could say, Before i relaxed slightly and watched the fireflies performing their little dance in the moonlight...

Really great imagery,

Really great imagery, especially the section about the moon as an eye, blinking slowly.
Great stuff!

Lottie.. This story, is Far

Lottie..
This story, is Far off Perfect,
It's Immense.
..And I'm pretty sure Immense is better than Perfect.
Fire Fox and Little Fox Eh? ;] [WonderlandOnline]
And tbqh, it was stunning.
You seriously thought this out Lottie, From the carved mask, to the blinking moons.
Annd..
I'm dedicating this song to it..

Fireflies - Owl City.

I Think it suits the story :]

As I said, Stunning +& Amazinng xD

Your English teacher'll be Amazedd As much as I was when I found out you wrote this.
Ciao Innabit** xD Byee \o

Omfg there's smileys ;D Smiling Frown Twisted Evil Sticking out tongue Shocked Puzzled Redface Eye Laughing out loud Ooh Sad Idea --> Exclaim Question Barf! Cool ...

Kinda lame :L
Density's picture

"I beleive that the great

"I beleive that the great deers of the past are up there,"

When I read that my mind yelled, "LION KING."

But seriously though. This writing is phenomenal.

/waits patiently for more.
Latte's picture

Pmsl. Ty Abbs. ^^

Pmsl. Ty Abbs. ^^
Latte's picture

Lion King, xD I think thats

Lion King, xD I think thats where my brain got it from.
I need a name for my little fawn though. ;3

Yush, That's the word to

Yush, That's the word to describe this Piece..

Phenomenal..

I can see it in Broadway now ;]
Latte's picture

I wish more people would read

Smiling I wish more people would read it, I spent ages thinking it up and editing it!
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Wow, indeed.

Wow, indeed. Laughing out loud
Pegasicorn's picture

I'm amazed at the metaphor

I'm amazed at the metaphor you came up with for the sun and moon.