OC check 'n' help!

Shanol's picture
- "I know, that people still visit my pages, and see my posts."

I want to ask all of you, my friends, for help!
I want to make my characters more original and interesting, and who knows about originality better than you all??! ^^ I'll post sketches and information about the character, and will wait for your comments. You can tell me anything you want! Critique, show all my mistakes! I must to learn and know, what I do wrong! And please, let me know, do you like it or not, even if you just visited the page, tell me few words about it.

Who is ready to help me in this way? Let me please know ^^
BigBunny's picture

Big Bunny will help.

Big Bunny will help. Eye Smiling


Yay first page is mine Exclaim Exclaim
We Are Always Special When We Are With Friends.

Well, my opinions might be

Well, my opinions might be little odd, but when you ask for originality, I can't refuse to help.

Or at least try to help.

Guess it is your character

Guess it is your character Knife you want some critique, right?
Shanol's picture

PLK217, yes, you right ^^

PLK217, yes, you right ^^
Motto ijimete...

Well, I have nothing much to

Well, I have nothing much to tell you. Except that by now I still don't know about him anything more, than how he looks and that he is probably mad and has some sort of inner pain. That isn't much.

You asked for originality. If you want help, then think about this: What would make a man more original - the hat he wears or the childhood he had?

I do not say the visage is not important, only that I've already seen his scribble, finished picture and another picture of him on his bio, but I still cannot give you any feedback on it, for I still don't know him.
You now know how he looks. Ok, work with it.
He has scars - how did he get those? In a fight, some accident or did he make them himself?
He wars Skull mask - you said it hides his pain. What pain?
You mentioned he disappeared in the Old Oak. Is that place somehow important to him?
etc..

Maybe (and I believe it is highly probable) you know the answers to these questions. You know this character, his past, his quirks, his favorite color... But as long as these things stay only in your head, I can't tell you whether this character is original or not.


(I said I might be odd...)
Shanol's picture

Thank you, I need some time

Thank you, I need some time to write full bio.. you really helped, even if you not know him, you already gave me little push ^^
Motto ijimete...